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上外英语MTI翻译硕士英语这科总分为100分，其中作文占60分，可以说作文的成败直接决定了基英的成败。然而，基英作文并非普通的小型写作，虽然卷面上并未要求字数，但一般不推荐低于800词（或多于1000词）。

在这个字数下，若是内容贫瘠，则无法撑起文章的规模；若是强行利用考场套路用废话充字数，则会让文章又臭又长。无论哪种情况，都会让这篇作文失败。那么，要想成功地在考场上完成一篇基英作文，需要做哪些功课？

一、上外翻译硕士英语作文题几个特点

以下七条原则，忽视其中任何一条，都会影响到最终分数：

•Fact 1: 作为非母语者，所谓的英语写作本质上是一场大型的无稿汉译英

•Fact 2: 翻硕备考生的作文中有许多高中生都能识别的基础语法错误

•Fact 3: 几乎所有阅卷老师都对爆款模板文深恶痛绝

•Fact 4: 变幻莫测的词汇、叹为观止的句式并不是一篇好作文的唯一判断标准

•Fact 5: 优秀的英文写作能力植根于细致的精读和基础汉语写作能力

•Fact 6: 英语作文相较于汉语作文更容易离题、偏题和逻辑不畅

•Fact 7: 英语作文进步最快的训练方式是外刊仿写

二、与中式英语作文划清界限

中式英语作文的特点

•遣词造句直白粗暴，很多Chinglish和语法疏漏

•结构安排的逻辑比较清晰，但过于简单以至于十分幼稚

•内容空洞，信息量低，读来虚浮无力，没有思辨性

•口号式论述，用文字证明文字，喜欢拾人牙慧，缺少主见

•中国特色学生腔（卖弄连接词、高级语法、生僻词语等）

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典型中式英语作文例文节选

Online Rumors

Internet has become part of our life, people use computer everywhere, such as
they keep in touch with their friends and family, they also
use computer to do their work. There is no doubt that computer facilitate our life. But the problem
also comes, as there is no clear and powerful laws to limit
the act,
some people attack others by the
rude words. We also can
read the rumors on the Internet, like the end of the world is coming. Such rumors bring negative sides to the society. As there is no rules can punish
the person who spread the rumors, more and more people use the Internet to do the immoral acts. The celebrities are the main victims. In order to catch more people’s attention, some websites spread the untrue information about the celebrities, which annoys these public figures. Online rumors need to be limited.

简析：

这段节选充分暴露了绝大多数中国学生写英语作文的问题，总结下来主要有：

①基础语法基本功薄弱。冠词、介词等基本语法错误频出

②语言啰嗦。相近意思的句子通过换词、改句式反复重复，貌似内容丰富，实则翻来覆去说相同的内容

③中式英语。根据中文表达直接组织英语句子，写出“一读就知道是中文”的中式英语

④论述乏力。空喊口号、空提要求，没有例证-分析-结论的逻辑链条，没有循证论述的写作气质。

（考场作文能力层次）

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三、范文赏析：

Internet Culture: Amusing Ourselves to Death

(娱乐至死，标题吸睛)

Born at the turn of centuries at the height of the Internet age, we entered a world of entertainment industries thriving across the board. Too many
of us have become slaves to numerous video games and TV plays that were supposed to free us and give us more time to experience life. We are gradually engrossed in Tittytainment, such as scandals of stars, rejecting critical thinking. However, as we tend to amuse ourselves to death, the lack of thoughts is taking its toll on the public, especially youngsters at the bottom of the economic heap. From my perspective, this problem results in a lack of motivation and it will erode people’s values.

(第一段从大画面入手，介绍世界范围内娱乐至死的现象。描写生动，信息厚度很好。遵循了“背景+主题+观点”的首段写作结构；语言质量也很高，好词好句密度比较大，且几乎没有可以指责的硬性错误)

In contrast to traditional media like newspapers, the Internet is much more likely to lead youngsters astray. At first glance, Internet media seems to boast convenience and efficiency in terms of advantages. However, take a closer look, and
you will see that they bear unshrinkable duty in the decline of critical thinking. With advanced information technologies ubiquitous to every corner of the world, our lives are filled with virtual amusement, such as video games, which will waste our pockets of time. For example, the Tik Tok and the mobile game Honor of Kings witnessed their popularity in China and even in the world. Despite being constant sources of joy, they resulted in the addiction of the Internet
among youngsters. As teenagers lack self-control, most of them tend to immerse themselves in the virtual world and get lost.

(第二段画面范围缩小，集中于互联网媒体对青年的戕害。论述遵循了“实例+分析评价”的循证论述原则，没有落入文字游戏的圈套)

Furthermore, as entertainment industries increasingly pursue profits and enormous publicity, they spare no effort in drawing attention from the public and bring myriad problems. The reason why TV plays starred by popular online celebrities with huge fan bases are fashionable across China is the bandwagon effect of youngsters. Entertainment industries tend to hype online influencers in order to attract teenagers with deceptively high-quality programmes. But actually, these programmes are low-budget and invaluable. With traditional media gone out of our focus, what we can do to keep up with the trend of times is to access the Internet and watch these programmes. Therefore, all these low-quality programmes will go viral and lower our discrimination in variety shows.

（第三段是第二段的平行段，论述角度转为影视娱乐行业）

上外考研英语MTI英语翻译基础翻译练习讲析节选

“Amusing ourselves to death” demonstrates the dilemma the working-class encounters—unlike social elites, they are under great pressure of daily life and have less outlets for their passive emotions. Those regarded as the “working-class” tend to be paid less than social elites. The typical working man would collect his wages at the end of a month and then, it was widely believed, would struggle to raise their children. In this regard Tittytainment serves as the best way for them to seek comfort. Admittedly, reality shows, role playing games and earworms, to a large extent, can relieve their stress and loneliness. However, when they lose their own perspective in terms of high-quality entertainment, they will be marginalized in the society dominated by elites and conversely feel dejected both in their work and life in the end.

（第四段把论述从表面往下走了一步，从社会层面分析了娱乐至死、奶头乐产生的根本原因，即社会经济原因。同时与上两段的内容有具体联系，规避了内容的割裂感。深度分析的段落对作者的基础社会知识要求比较高，积累不够的同学往往会出现文字游戏现象，即“把同一句话用压缩和扩写的方式反复重写；宝贵的是，这一段的内容没有一句废话）

From what has been discussed above, although amusement is an effective way to relieve one’s pressure, it fails to deliver the goods for most youngsters and the working-class in this Internet era. Unwilling to fall prey to the content creators? It is not what you can handle alone.

（最后一段是对全文核心论点的总结。最后的疑问句字字锤心，给人留下深刻印象）

总评：

这篇文章基本能够代表考场上写出的作文水平的第一梯队。主要优点包括：

①语言质量高。大量使用了许多地道的搭配，用词也没有出现失控的现象；在表述逻辑复杂的信息时，能够恰当使用语法，组成正确的长难句；

②结构清楚有逻辑。行文结构是“引入-分论点1（具体现象）-分论点2（具体现象）-分论点3（内在原因）-总结”的总分总布局，读来逻辑流畅，信息充分，论述有力；

③循证论述的写作气质。作者避免了常见的喊口号式论述，用丰富生动的实例佐证了自己的观点，增强了论证的说服力；

④亮眼的开头和结尾。开头段使用了吸睛的概念（娱乐至死，奶头乐）作为全文对互联网文化的评价，能够引起读者兴趣；结尾段用疑问句加深了无力感，给读者留下深刻的阅读印象。

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